Alex watched the couple walk off. He jammed the headphones deeper into his ears and pivoted on his right foot. A flash of white heat crossed his eyes, the iris deepened in blue. He looked back and regretted it immediately: they were kissing not 20 feet away from where they parted ways. He wondered how [name] could do this to him, how it all could happen so soon. He focused on a small rock in his way and kicked it further down his path. He concentrated on the continual kicking until the couple was out of his view. Connor sang him a song about Calendars. Alex was unsung.
He bit his upper lip and then his lower, almost drawing blood. He felt sick and pumped his hands in and out of fists, trying to catch his breath. He was involuntarily running. He didn't know where he was going; his feet led the way. His run changed to sprint when he realized his pace. He was moving too fast to see the man turning the corner, and grazed his arm. Alex lost balance, lost control, and lost [name]. He looked towards the man with whom he just collided. He noticed papers strewn across the sidewalk. Alex wondered what they were, with important crests and raised print. Official, he thought. "Sorry," Alex was sorry about a lot of things, but running into that man was not one of them.
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I was really intrigued by this one for several reasons. The main one being the meaning of the lines "Connor sang him a song about Calendars. Alex was unsung." I'm not entirely sure what it is you're getting at there, but felt it was important to a deeper sense of the character's feelings. It could be that it's just an allusion that I don't get (which the capitalization of "Calenders" suggests), but either way, I wondered what you meant by being unsung. Most people never have songs written about them, so the literal meaning doesn't fit; all I could make of it was that he's upset over unnoticed/unrequited love or interest, but your characters tend to be a little more depth that than. Plus, from the quirky wording, I'm led to believe it was a very carefully-chosen pair of sentences. Anyway, I enjoyed the reading, as always. Keep it up. :)
P.S. - I think "the man with which he just collided" should have the word "which" replaced with whom...I make that error all the time, so I could be wrong, but a man is a who(m), not a what(which).
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